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This week for writing the goal was: Use a variety of sentence structures,beginnings and lengths to give effect. For this goal we wrote a story using a template using different lengths and sentence starters. I wrote my first story on a bondi beach and my second one on rock jumping championships. Here are my stories and the plans.
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It was the world champs for rock jumping. It was the biggest title in the world. I was excited at first but then the nerves hit. As I climbed up to the top of the mountain I could see my limbs shaking. I walked up to the very top and there I was about to hit the water 321 jump. I jumped but when I looked down I couldn't believe it. There were so many rocks that I could land on I had to aim perfectly. I swirl in the air crash I landed smack in the middle of the rocks. I was out to it like a whale on the shaw. When I started to open my eyes I could see medical vans everywhere I was scared and worried about what would happen to me. Mum and Dad help.
I haven’t done anything wrong. 5 years later I found out that I was fully paralized an was told I wasn’t going to live. But I proved them wrong. I was the fastest to recover faster than Usain bolt. That was my life.
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It was the world champs for rock jumping. It was the biggest title in the world. I was excited at first but then the nerves hit. As I climbed up to the top of the mountain I could see my limbs shaking.
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I walked up to the very top and there I was about to hit the water 321 jump. I jumped but when I looked down I couldn't believe it. There were so many rocks that I could land on I had to aim perfectly
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I swirl in the air crash I landed smack in the middle of the rocks. I was out to it like a whale on the shaw. When I started to open my eyes I could see medical vans everywhere I was scared and worried about what would happen to me. Mum and Dad help.
I haven’t done anything wrong. 5 years later I found out that I was fully paralized an was told I wasn’t going to live. But I proved them wrong. I was the fastest to recover faster than Usain bolt. That was my life.
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Do you like to use different sentence lengths?.
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